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afflatus, inflatus, my morning globe,
as lithe as your impermanence.
and home! dread homes! are rabbit dugs,
spoonholed piles of mexican brick
where nothing ever touches down,
nothing here alive receives
the plains’ poor offering of gypsy light,
the ugly wind that meets the mudline.

[metaphors]
1. a mottled fence
2. and how these storms hold faceless teeth
that slat their eyes through butter-wood
then purge their guts on wintered florets
4. some freshly headless nativities,
their polyethylene skirts upturned
from violent sacks
5. and knowing i’m a souless
speck

             i lick at what is manifest
        beneath your hair
   each poison tab
a colour
acid
fire
  or lake
     a brothel
         and religious studies

i know, i know you never mean
to murder
or complete
me

but do not say “live for yourself”.
i’ve come online to see the god
that came before me.

we are so poorly married
like bookend spines of Plath and Hughes
up on the shelf
are somehow
synonymous
with love.

i’m left to my device too well,
belonging like the secret bedrock
or saplings, stoned,
hung over streams
which do not bend into your wake.

my phlebotomist believes
in what she takes,
lords in her tubes

so i am something, yet,
perhaps in tiny pieces.
i say to them:
you lay like art,
you can almost live
in words.
i am not real just because i am told as much. i am real the same way Santa Claus is real - only through faith borne of need.

Merry Christmas.
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Given 2012-12-23
windstorms and labwork by =thetaoofchaos ( Suggested by vespera and Featured by thorns )
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this is one of my very favourite things you've written <3
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013   Writer
thanks. I appreciate that.
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swansisters Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congrat on DLD, this is wonderful <3
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013   Writer
Thanks! I appreciate you coming by and reading. <3
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
great rhythm to this.

sounds great, though I'm still trying to discern the meaning.

congrats on the DD (I think I may have said this already...)!!
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012   Writer
Thanks! I'm glad you like the sounds. I am happy to note you my intentions for the meaning, if you like. :)
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
perhaps once I've given it a few more reads :) thank you.
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erco71 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
congrats on the DD :clap: ..I am humbled by your amazing creative mind..wonderful piece :)
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012   Writer
I really appreciate that. Thanks. :)
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:iconerco71:
erco71 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
welcome..well deserved:)
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Holy fuck.
This runs deep.
I want to know more...please KIK me.
Lords in her tubes - YES!

Gosh that last strophe, made my eyes watery.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012   Writer
:heart::heart: thanks Natty! you can ask me anything, anytime.
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD for this wonderful poem!!!
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012   Writer
Thanks so much! Glad you stopped by. Merry Christmas
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Merry Christmas to you, too!
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
I'm always a bit reluctant to comment on poetry for fear of sounding like an idiot, because I'm thoroughly a prosemonkey, particularly when it comes to experimental poetry but I just wanted to say that your work is fascinating to me (mostly because it gets to emotional depths that I have a hard to digging into), especially this piece, which I'd had saved up in my message box for the past two days. Congrats on the DD. :D
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
thank you for swimming into unknown waters, i appreciate the effort. i'm the same way about prose, as far as intelligently commenting. :) i'm happy you discovered some emotional depth here. sometimes, i can't tell if my style is conducive to that or not.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012   Writer
It definitely was for me. There's something freeing about your forms that does it, I think. :)
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012   Writer
Cool! I am constantly trying to find ways to unbind my art from the confines of form without completely annihilating the idea of a comprehensible foundation.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012   Writer
This is definitely more accessible for me in the grand scheme of experimental poetry than other things I've found (although I do think it's all interesting), so I think you're succeeding. :)
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012   Writer
:D thanks! If you do ever come across any perplexing experimental poetry, I would be grateful if you linked me. I like the challenge.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012   Writer
Will do! :D
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
Congratulations on a wonderful and fully deserved D.D!
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
Thanks mr. C!
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Cairngorm77 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
almost dear one almost
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
almost? :) you almost liked it?
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
Now, this is exactly what I meant when we were talking about emotion in poetry. I will say that until the metaphor stanza kicked in I didn't like the word choices too much but I'm weird about old fashioned sounding words in poetry.

Once we got to the metaphors and the rest I was hooked. I read this three times just to make sure I picked through everything properly. And also because it's just wondrous. The Plath/Hughes bit was fantastic-- I'm a little obsessed with that relationship. That last stanza was heaven too, though. Existentialism at its best.

I feel as if I'm rambling because I can't quite pin down what made me love this so much. Everything just meshes into a perfect snapshot of what love can always be. Not to mention that it's not someone whining or lamenting about how their love life isn't the best-- which is how I feel a lot of writers (myself included) come across.

I'm so glad I saw this in the DDs today-- I needed it. Thank you for writing it.
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
thanks for your in depth analysis. your thoughts on how you reacted to this is pure gold for me. yeah, the beginning, i got caught up in trying to sound pretty, maybe a little too hard? dunno, but i like the way it sounds as well as the image i was trying to portray - that of a false balloon planet that i sort of breath life into when i wake . . . and some other stuff. actually, i'm still contemplating the concrete meanings (should there be any) as i sort of wrote it in a few bright streams of consciousness and then cleaned it up, which was only a couple of days ago. i like coming back to a piece after a little time away from it to see if it still speaks to me, and i haven't really gone through that process as of yet. the DD kind of threw me off my game. :lol:

i really love it when people tell me they can't pin down what they loved about my poetry. that's actually what i'm going for - i don't know what i'm doing, in this world, on this site, writing these words. there's just . . . something about being alive that seems compelling (and i don't mean that facetiously). i feel like i've kept the mystery of myself intact, without any ugly dissections for the reader to review like a post mortem. hopefully, it's that wonder and secret dread of life that i feel that i'm able to transport to the reader.

anyway, i see your ramble and raise you double rambles. :heart:
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LabLayers Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Student Interface Designer
Merry Christmas, and congrats on the DD! :santa: :heart:
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
Happy holidays to you. Thanks!
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neonxaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats, good sir!
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
thanks!
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Adonael Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
There are some obtrusive yet beautiful images at work here and your obscurity is playful, experimentalist for the sake of showing that you're grappling with existential stuff - it's what I took from it.

Overall, cool!
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
yes! "obtrusive" is one of the best descriptors anyone has ever offered to define my poetry. i would say the images obtrude into my mind and i try to remain faithful to their origins with my art. yes, i am an experimentalist, mostly because i have no better tools at the moment with which to "grapple" as you so finely put it, with the issues of the day - usually that is trying to figure out what i'm doing here and why i'm feeling, thinking, doing whatever it is that i'm feeling, thinking, doing. thank you for the read and the comments. :)
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Adonael Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are most welcome and thank you for truly weighing up my feedback. It's good to see responsive writers :)
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Art-Snob-Solutions Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
Huh. Alrighty then.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
yeah, i know. thanks for reading.
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
Merry Christmas to you, Shane. And congrats on the DD! Beautiful work.

And I do believe in Santa Claus, by the way. :santa:
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
Thank you Lisa. If you believe in Santa, then I should think he would have the common decency to exist. :heart:
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
I would hope so. :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:faint: I'm behind on my inbox, and regretfully so, after stumbling on this. Congrats on the DD, Shane! Very well deserved!!
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
Thank you Rachel! And congrats on your DLD POTD :hug:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure, and thank you! :hug:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
Have a nice day and Happy Holidays! :santa:
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
Thanks for stopping by. I'll take the nice day and whatever happy holidays are available. :)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Take them all, good sir :la:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
haha, congratz on the dd.
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   Writer
Thanks! BTW,Your feature journal was nb4 a DD and DLD pick of the day. So that means you're cool. ;)
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
yes of course ;)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   General Artist
I just saw this got a DD, not long after I commented too! :squee:
Congratulations, dear heart! :heart:
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