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clean, now, of your diaries;
sun cut, singed through the brume

pure and guiltless as a virus, white
without a needle eye or task to

lay into your inner brides, the bent
to disturb your wealth of fruit skins

or run my pathos through the calculus
and see my dimples rise as underlings

to terrorize your pond face, scold its careful
glass with frost or lunge into your acquiescence,

the satin cinch for your panoplies,
to make pillows for my wreck.

what am i when i’ve no effigy for doubt,
no biorhythms to sicken with childish bellows from my song?

there is no dormant eggshell to gather up this loss
and nothing left from which to birth;

if i cannot be of something else,
then nothing will become me.
nothing will happen
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:iconshadowedacolyte:
"what am i when i’ve no effigy for doubt" is a killer line, though the second half of the couplet dulls it somewhat. Still, great job.
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thetaoofchaos Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
They aren't really purposeful poetic couplets, but I think I agree with you. I have grown unhappy with that particular line myself as time has passed. Thanks for the feedback. 
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nightnocturne78 Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are so talented. I love this poem<333
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thetaoofchaos Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's very kind, thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
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LadyMortimus Feb 5, 2014  Student General Artist
I love your style. This is really good, it flows so nicely.
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thetaoofchaos Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy to hear you think so. :) Thanks.
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thetaoofchaos Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :heart:
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:iconrembulanemas:
beautiful as always.
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thetaoofchaos Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for reading.  :)
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