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i’d have married every bedside witch from here to east dallas

i’d have glistened like a worm to their mescaline psalms

i’d have mired in sinuous wineskin, repentant spectra

i’d Om along in cooing groups, babble with freethinkers

all my endeavors would be gas station derelicts

all of my wrongs would be quasi-continuous

even the over-sought moon would protest

and i wouldn’t recognize one half of the universe
NaPoWriMo 2014 April 30th
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if i hadn't had the drunk luck to meet you by thetaoofchaos is a "beautifully woven, unrelenting piece" (suggester's words). ( Suggested by UnspecifiedUnknown and Featured by neurotype )

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Nabium Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014
wonderful. truly wonderful.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2014   Writer
Thanks!
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014
Probably the best first line I have read this year...
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014   Writer
Haha, thanks!  First lines are the key to making through NaPoWriMo, I've found. 
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Canis44 Featured By Owner Edited Jul 21, 2014  Student Writer
This piece is like, Ginsberg meets Bukowski. :D
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014   Writer
That is truly stratospheric praise.  Thanks!
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SaturnTraveler Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
No matter how many times I read it, it never looses it's magic. Great work. 
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014   Writer
I appreciate you saying that.  Thanks again for reading. :)
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:iconkarinta:
Karinta Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Student General Artist
Brilliant metaphors!!
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
Thanks! :)
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:icontheweelad:
TheWeeLad Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014
this is the kinda thing i'd want to be able to say once I find a woman I can love and who would love me back.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014   Writer
I really appreciate that. Finding such a companion has proven to be an endeavor worthy of my art and my dreams. I hope the same happens for you.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014

And back yet again to do what I had forgotten to do 19 hours ago:  to fave your piece, which holds such lucid moments for me with a cornucopia of artistic grit. :+fav:

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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014   Writer
 Thanks, Jade. I appreciate your support. :hug: 
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014   Writer
Thanks! :)
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LibbyKeppen Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The last line got me.  I love this.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014   Writer
I'm glad you do.   Thanks for reading!
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EskeltheIceMaster Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations on your DD! Very interesting piece. :)
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014   Writer
Thanks!
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EskeltheIceMaster Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
Hey, congratulations on the DD!! I'm so pleased to see your wonderful work recognized.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
Thanks, Lisa!  I appreciate you stopping by. :)
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
:heart:
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
Congratulations on the DD, Shane. :)
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
Thanks, Lance! :)
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Oigirl65 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
This is great. :)
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
I'm glad you feel that way about it. Thanks!
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Oigirl65 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014
You are welcome!
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
congrats on the DD, one of my favorites of yours. well deserved.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
Thank you! I really appreciate that.
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GreatWhitePanda Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist
I love this so much! It's beautiful!
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
I'm glad you think so. Thanks!
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:iconfootinadream:
footinadream Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student General Artist
I love it! i know what poem I'm giving to my significant other next valentines day
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
I appreciate that. Thanks!
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
:)
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
Thanks!
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stafford0705 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
most romantic thing ive read in a while....
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
I'm glad you think so.  Thanks for reading. :)
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onetwistedpoet Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
This works so well, each line strong enough on its own and so much more as a whole piece. Thanks for sharing.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
Thanks so much!
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randomaxes Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
drunk luck is a juxtaposed oxymoron for me...if that's a thing.
but your concept and ability to correlate likely resulting undone life scenarios without your other half is quite lucid.
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
Drunk luck could be oxymoronical, or perhaps redundant. In any case, I appreciate the thoughtful comment.  Thanks.
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straygod Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
well done
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
Thanks. 
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
You've always done well with at least one major feature whenever you participate in the NaPoWriMo. :nod:
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014   Writer
Haha, you're right, Jade! :D All three years I think I've had one featured. Thanks for stopping by. :heart:
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AfricanObserver Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
A vivid pilgrimage of love.
Beautiful.
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