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news of the night:
they're madly searching for fresh acts of God
(or quantum luck) on second floors,
scattered tumblers in trailer parks.

nevermind the great uncertainty
leaning down your neckline,
the untelling weight-hood and period-luminosities
they teach you to ignore in school
until your comfortable derangement
can be seen from a dozen parsecs away
as one more animal armageddon.

why don't our hands,
hovels,
and spirits
prove
against our weather?
NaPoWriMo - April 4th, 2012

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vespera Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I would love to hear this out loud. You should ask Kate to let you read it on her radio show :)
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thetaoofchaos Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
hey, maybe i'll do a reading of it. i have a podcast account. but, who's Kate?
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vespera Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
who's Kate? WHO IS KATE? (LOL, just giving you crap) =sunshinegypsy
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thetaoofchaos Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:lol: ahh, sorry. i'm bad with names, even when they're written down in front of me. :blush:

a radio show, huh? cool. thanks for the idea.
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vespera Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
oh I'm horrible with people's names. and user names. and any name in general...
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:iconarchelyxs:
"parsec" is among the best words
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thetaoofchaos Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it is. I'm sure it was Star Wars where I first heard that word. ;)
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SilverInkblot Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
From one living in Tornado Alley - yeah, that's what it's like. I really love the title on this; it grabbed my attention when I saw the link on Twitter. And the first stanza is wonderful. I feel like you could have stopped right there and stil had a solid poem :D
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thetaoofchaos Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed the first part. Perhaps it could have survived on it's own, but the second and third strophes are what I really wanted the poem to be about. Otherwise, there's no analysis or interpretation of the events and it becomes pure observational verse.
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SilverInkblot Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Fair enough - I often like simple observational poetry myself, and letting the reader draw their own conclusion from the image. And I may have done a presentation in my Modernism class on Imagism for this reason :giggle:
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