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news of the night:
they're madly searching for fresh acts of God
(or quantum luck) on second floors,
scattered tumblers in trailer parks.

nevermind the great uncertainty
leaning down your neckline,
the untelling weight-hood and period-luminosities
they teach you to ignore in school
until your comfortable derangement
can be seen from a dozen parsecs away
as one more animal armageddon.

why don't our hands,
hovels,
and spirits
prove
against our weather?
NaPoWriMo - April 4th, 2012

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vespera Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I would love to hear this out loud. You should ask Kate to let you read it on her radio show :)
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012   Writer
hey, maybe i'll do a reading of it. i have a podcast account. but, who's Kate?
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vespera Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
who's Kate? WHO IS KATE? (LOL, just giving you crap) =sunshinegypsy
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012   Writer
:lol: ahh, sorry. i'm bad with names, even when they're written down in front of me. :blush:

a radio show, huh? cool. thanks for the idea.
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vespera Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
oh I'm horrible with people's names. and user names. and any name in general...
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012
"parsec" is among the best words
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012   Writer
it is. I'm sure it was Star Wars where I first heard that word. ;)
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
From one living in Tornado Alley - yeah, that's what it's like. I really love the title on this; it grabbed my attention when I saw the link on Twitter. And the first stanza is wonderful. I feel like you could have stopped right there and stil had a solid poem :D
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012   Writer
thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed the first part. Perhaps it could have survived on it's own, but the second and third strophes are what I really wanted the poem to be about. Otherwise, there's no analysis or interpretation of the events and it becomes pure observational verse.
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Fair enough - I often like simple observational poetry myself, and letting the reader draw their own conclusion from the image. And I may have done a presentation in my Modernism class on Imagism for this reason :giggle:
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